this is my 15 minute writing
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93
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Word count
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93
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My Writing
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The Fox slowly creeped up to the small animal formerly known as a Quokka. The Quokka did not notice at first, but as the Fox grow closer the Quokka slowly began to realize that there was a fox was near. And when the Fox sprang from his hiding spot the Quokka screamed, jumped then ran in a second the Quokka was gone and the Fox had already spot his new meal or victim if you won’t. And then the story ended and the Quokka was safe and the Fox’s stomach full. The end.
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Kia ora, My name is Malcolm and i’m from Gisborne Intermediate School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the end where everyone was happy besides the animal the fox ate.
I learnt that there is an animal called Quokka and fox is it’s pray.
Maybe you could add a bit more content to the story to make it a bit more exciting other than that I liked it.
Overall it was interesting to find out some new things and have a little laugh at the picture
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