I ran and ran I didn’t stop to look back. If I did they would have got it and then
That would mean the end of the world as we know it. The crows squawking and
flying over top of me. Then further I got away the louder they squawked. Then
they started to dive in one at a time but the I held it up over my head and then
They stop so they didn’t hit the thing that will be the end of the world.
I finally escaped and got out of there reach. They can’t go beyond the edge of
the forest. Well what use to be a forest anyway. When they moved into the
forest all the trees died.
Kia ora. I am Troy from Gisborne Intermediate School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked that you tell us a story on your blog that hooks the reader in with an eye catching title and good vocabulary.
I learnt that you could be a really good writer in the future.
Maybe you could make it a bit longer next time
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Kia ora. I am Wailer from Gisborne Intermediate School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you have put a lot of detail on the ¨Dead Forest¨story.
I learnt that i can learn from other people from other schools.
Maybe you could go back and looked threw your storys.
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